Review password help page

1 files changed, 34 insertions, 48 deletions

diff --git a/help/C/data-passwords.page b/help/C/data-passwords.page
index f5cb8b0ce..9bfef0c2a 100644
--- a/help/C/data-passwords.page
+++ b/help/C/data-passwords.page
@@ -5,8 +5,8 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#start"/>
-    <link type="guide" xref="bookmark"/>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.9" version="0.1" date="2013-05-09" status="draft"/>
+    <link type="guide" xref="data"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.10" date="2013-07-05" status="review"/>
 
     <credit type="author copyright">
       <name>Aruna Sankaranarayanan</name>
@@ -14,91 +14,77 @@
       <years>2013</years>
     </credit>
     <credit type="copyright editor">
-      <name></name>
-      <email its:translate="no"></email>
-      <years></years>
+      <name>Ekaterina Gerasimova</name>
+      <email its:translate="no">kittykat3756@gmail.com</email>
+      <years>2013</years>
     </credit>
 
     <include href="legal.xml" xmlns="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"/>
 
-    <desc>How do I remove and update passwords that <app>Web</app> remembers for me?</desc>
+    <desc>How do I remove and update memorised passwords?</desc>
   </info>
 
   <title>Stored passwords</title>
 
-  <p>You can configure <app>Web</app> to save all your passwords, and then
-  refer to this saved information in the event that you forget a particular
-  password. Your saved passwords are stored in
-  <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
-  <gui style="menuitem">Personal Data</gui>
-  <gui style="tab">Passwords</gui></guiseq>.</p>
+  <p>You can save all of your passwords so that you do not have to reenter them
+  every time that you want to log into a website. Your saved passwords are
+  stored in <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui><gui style="menuitem">Personal
+  Data</gui><gui style="tab">Passwords</gui></guiseq>.</p>
 
-<section id="edit-preferences">
-  <title>Edit your preferences</title>
+<section id="pref">
+  <title>Edit password preferences</title>
 
-  <p><app>Web</app> will offer to remember your password every time you log in
-  to a particular website, if you have modified your preferences suitably.</p>
+  <p>Your passwords will be remembered by default. You can check this or change
+  your settings in <gui>Preferences</gui>.</p>
 
   <steps>
-    <title>To modify your preferences:</title>
     <item>
-      <p>Select <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
+      <p>Open <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
       <gui style="menuitem">Preferences</gui>
       <gui style="tab">Privacy</gui></guiseq>.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Check the <gui style="checkbox">Remember passwords</gui> checkbox if
-      it is unchecked.</p>
+      <p>The <gui style="checkbox">Remember passwords</gui> checkbox will be
+      ticked if your preferences are set to save passwords. Untick it to forget
+      passwords.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Click <gui style="button">Close</gui>.</p>
+      <p>Press <gui style="button">Close</gui>.</p>
     </item>
   </steps>
 
-  <p>Once you have finished changing your preferences, you will be prompted by
-  <app>Web</app> to save your password whenever you use one to log in to a
-  website. This will be in the form of a yellow panel on the top of your
-  webpage asking you whether you would like the current password to be saved.
-  Select <gui style="button">Store password</gui> to store the password and
-  it will be saved in <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
-  <gui style="menuitem">Personal Data</gui><gui style="tab">Passwords</gui>
-  </guiseq>. To see your passwords there, check the
-  <gui style="checkbox">Show passwords</gui> checkbox at the bottom.</p>
-
 </section>
 
 <section id="remove">
   <title>Remove saved passwords</title>
 
-  <p>You can remove a stored password at any time. To do so:</p>
+  <p>You can remove a stored password at any time.</p>
 
   <steps>
     <item>
-      <p>Select <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
+      <p>Open <guiseq><gui style="menu">Web</gui>
       <gui style="menuitem">Personal Data</gui>
       <gui style="tab">Passwords</gui></guiseq>.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>You will see a table with the titles <gui>Host name</gui> and
-      <gui>User name</gui>, and a list of values for them. You can also see
-      the associated passwords by checking the
-      <gui style="checkbox">Show passwords</gui> checkbox at the bottom.</p>
-    </item>
-    <item>
-      <p>Select the desired item from the list by clicking it.</p>
+      <p>Click on the username for the password which you want to delete.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Click <gui style="button">Remove</gui> to remove the item.</p>
-      <note style="tip">
-	<p>If you want to remove all your stored passwords at once, click
-	<gui style="button">Clear</gui>. Only the
-	<gui style="checkbox">Saved passwords</gui> checkbox will be checked.
-	Now click <gui style="button">Clear</gui> to clear all your
-	passwords.</p>
-      </note>
+      <p>Press <gui style="button">Remove</gui> to remove the saved
+      password.</p>
     </item>
   </steps>
 
+  <p>You can view the saved passwords by ticking the <gui style="checkbox">Show
+  passwords</gui> checkbox at the bottom of the window.</p>
+
+  <note style="tip">
+	  <p>If you want to remove all your stored passwords, press
+	  <gui style="button">Clear</gui>. Select only the
+	  <gui style="checkbox">Saved passwords</gui> checkbox and press
+    <gui style="button">Clear</gui> to delete all of your saved passwords.</p>
+  </note>
+
 </section>
 
 </page>